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style="font-size:22px;">絕句最新版</span></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕,巾幗頌</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">檐梅望李暗添香,墨韻書(shū)窗綺彩章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">巾幗堪肩承淑德,須眉不讓世流芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">(檐梅→淑女,李→賢君)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕·北國(guó)尋春</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紅爐煮酒春來(lái)早,暮雪烹茶意未遲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫陌尋芳追綺夢(mèng),耕耘塞外鎮(zhèn)邊陲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">驚蟄有感(下平七陽(yáng))</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上善若水/新疆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春雷蟄始驚天曉,玉露凝珠滴翠香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">紫氣浮煙田影動(dòng),清輝拂面托丹陽(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕·二月二(上平十灰)</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二月蟄驚龍舉首,屠蘇素帳韻初開(kāi)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">田疇布谷催耕垅,國(guó)泰年豐福運(yùn)來(lái)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">附:屠蘇這里指草庵堂舍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七絕·題逸韻軒詩(shī)社</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上善若水/新疆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">逸韻文壇邀異客,通途瑰寶覽佳章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">筆耕瀚海雄心在,歲月甄詩(shī)有墨香。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">七律·逸韻軒詩(shī)社賀詞</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">文/上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">逸韻文軒沁墨香,儒林翰苑詠華章。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春潮好映蘭燈凈,客路堪追綺夢(mèng)長(zhǎng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">妙筆培元蘇乳杏,賢師栽蘗育新篁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">群英聚首呈書(shū)卷,賀典詩(shī)壇國(guó)粹揚(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">詩(shī)家人讀詩(shī):</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 主題明確,情感真摯。該詩(shī)圍繞“逸韻軒詩(shī)社”展開(kāi),賀詞對(duì)詩(shī)社的贊美與祝福,主題鮮明,緊扣詩(shī)社核心。字里行間洋溢著對(duì)詩(shī)社的喜愛(ài)與期待,從詩(shī)社文化氛圍,詩(shī)社成員創(chuàng)作成果及未來(lái)發(fā)展的期許,情感熱烈且真誠(chéng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.意象豐富:運(yùn)用了諸多富有文化內(nèi)涵的意象,“墨香”“儒林翰苑”營(yíng)造出濃厚的文化藝術(shù)氛圍;“蘭燈”寓意光明與指引,象征詩(shī)社如明燈照亮文學(xué)之路;“乳杏”“新篁”代表新生資源,巧用典故“好映蘭燈凈,堪追綺夢(mèng)長(zhǎng)”形容大好前景,培育杰岀英才。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 2.意境高雅:整體營(yíng)造出一種高雅、充滿文化氣息的意境,仿佛讓人置身于文人墨客匯聚,吟詩(shī)賦詞的典雅場(chǎng)所。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 3.語(yǔ)言優(yōu)美:用詞精巧,如“沁墨香”“詠華章”“培元”“栽蘗”等,語(yǔ)言富有文采,典雅且凝練,展現(xiàn)出作者較高的文字功底。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 4.韻律和諧:作為七律,嚴(yán)格遵循格律要求,平仄協(xié)調(diào),押韻準(zhǔn)確,讀起來(lái)節(jié)奏明快,朗朗上口,韻律優(yōu)美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 5.結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn):首聯(lián)點(diǎn)明逸韻軒詩(shī)社充滿墨香,文人雅士在此詠誦華章,開(kāi)篇點(diǎn)題;頷聯(lián)從不同角度,以“春潮”“客路”為切入點(diǎn),表達(dá)對(duì)詩(shī)社發(fā)展前景的展望;頸聯(lián)著重強(qiáng)調(diào)詩(shī)社對(duì)新人的培育作用;尾聯(lián)則回到當(dāng)下,描繪群英聚首,借詩(shī)社慶典弘揚(yáng)國(guó)粹的場(chǎng)景,結(jié)構(gòu)完整,起承轉(zhuǎn)合自然流暢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6.意象稍顯傳統(tǒng)化,部分意象在創(chuàng)新方面略有欠缺,整體表述悄淺薄,對(duì)于詩(shī)社獨(dú)特的文化價(jià)值等方面挖掘不夠,未留回味思考空間。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 總體而言,這首七律是一首合格的詩(shī)社賀詞,在韻律、語(yǔ)言及結(jié)構(gòu)上表現(xiàn)出色,若能在內(nèi)容深度和意象創(chuàng)新上加以提升,會(huì)更具藝術(shù)感染力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">????</span></p>
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