<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">詩 會：中華慈善詩會</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">校 長：陌上花開</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">班主任：愛明、黃金歲月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">輔 導：惜 往 日</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">編 輯：愛明、如夢、默</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">審 核：愛 明 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作 者：聯36班學員</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> （本篇各位作者已經授權）</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.愛明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鏡自清高猶照水；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山含冷峻盡披霜。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：明扣。擬人手法運用得當，情中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">習習風來荷有韻；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">聲聲蛙鼓夜無眠。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：暗扣，一幅有色有聲的荷塘月色圖！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">思牽關外，秋夜搗衣萬戶；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">獨酌花間，金樽對影三人。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：以李白的兩首詩為典合詠，表達了月下人們不同的心境！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2. 黃金歲月</span></p><p class="ql-block">無緣玉宇桂宮幽，今夕何言，思君萬里；</p><p class="ql-block">有夢紅塵花徑遠，昔時此處，知己三杯。</p><p class="ql-block">評：上聯是天上之孤清，下聯為人間之常情，對比得當！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3. 惜往日</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">圓缺陰晴難自在；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">升沉來往且飄零。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：本句自對運用得當，借月喻人生的境遇，贊！</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4. 如 夢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉鏡凌空觀世態；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金風入檻慰人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：擬人手法運用得當，情景交融！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">故夢依依，溶溶皎色流銀漢；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春情脈脈，恰恰君顏映玉泉。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：如詩句子，思情意象表達到位！贊！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5. 木 瓜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清輝飄萬里；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">素影寂千秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：從空間到時間將月夜之寂描寫到位！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">皎皎如新磨可鑒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">溶溶似幻夢長存。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：比喻手法運用得當！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6. 默</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">疏枝飲露清輝冷；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">艷蕊含香夜色明。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：如詩如畫！美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7. 瓁 境</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">入夜嫦娥思舊夢；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">逢秋玉兔起新愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：以神話傳說入情，工整有意境！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一輪笑臉高高掛；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">半朵羞容淺淺生。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：擬人手法運用得當，美！</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8. 君 智?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">素魄溶溶明兩岸，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳人寂寂望扁舟。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：明扣。景物描寫暗含盼歸之意，贊！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一柄銀鉤，點點繁星獨釣；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">千家漁火，茫茫碧宇同輝。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：明扣。彎月如鉤，千家燈暖，景中含情！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9. 洛 兮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秋水留詩花入夢；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫦娥送客夜撩人。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：暗扣，傳說人物運用得當！詩情畫意！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一輪明鏡秋波映；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千嶂玉山夜影幽。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：明扣，月色下的山水靜謐迷人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉女峰前波弄影；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鮫人海里鏡含煙。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：童話世界里的月夜如畫！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千澗鏡波，移來四海升明夜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一池云錦，喚得三江共此時。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：境象曠達，升還可再琢，個見！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10. 怡 然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">午夜清輝疏影冷；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">深庭棲鳥語聲遲。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：如詩句子！美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒蟬靜夜悲聲切；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">桂魄中天玉露微。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：初秋的月夜涼意襲人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11. 楊柳依依</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒光細細金波淺；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉魄彎彎桂影偏。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：如詩句子！美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">兔爪乍伸，云端怯雁；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">銀勾初露，水底驚魚。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：比喻得當，生動形象！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12.人生無悔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉兔多情歡萬古；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫦娥有恨夢千秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：傳說運用得當！人物付與的情緒各有特色！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉影荷池花醉客；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清輝柳畔景迷人。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：荷塘月色美景怡人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古渡橋邊，一川蟾影牽鄉夢；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒山寺外，午夜鐘聲到客船。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：以思鄉之意象和古詩詞典故成聯，點贊！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13. 燕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉樹依山藏百鳥；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冰輪出海映千帆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：對仗工整！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">14. 執 著</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本自含情思欲斷；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">不應有恨得長圓。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：將月的意象體現得很棒！贊！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">15. 王龍超</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">帝女揚歌，廣寒宮里嫦娥舞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">神童舉袖，清暑堂前玉兔傾。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：用典合理，傳說迷人！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秋風寂寂，萬里金輪光晈晈；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜色幽幽，九州名苑舞翩翩。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：疊詞的運用增加了音律美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">葦影重重，十里荷花含玉鏡；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">馨芳馥馥，三秋桂子入冰壺。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：一個夏月，一個秋月，隔了！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">16. 王全興</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天上寒宮孤兔寂；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人間廣野鐵牛忙。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：孤寂與忙碌的對比，很有煙火氣！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">17. 瓊之島</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宮闕嫦娥揮舞袖；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鄉園桂子逸清香。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：動靜相宜，舞詞性不妥，改廣更工。</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芳草綿綿，水榭佳人歌婉轉；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清輝縷縷，江堤暗柳影婆娑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：月下水榭歌臺的美景表現得有聲有色！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?18. 春 江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大海汐聲遺玉鏡；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">遙天暝色灑清輝。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：對仗工整！意境美！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">19. 悠 然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一闕桂宮似明鏡；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">滿天星斗伴彎船。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：上聯圓月，下聯彎月，隔了！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">20. 夏 花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛙鼓聲聲，水波影動寒光映；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清輝皎皎，菡萏姿柔冷艷芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：寒光映與冷艷芳詞性不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">21.神 采</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉兔邀游，吳剛捧酒，盛請神舟來探密；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嫦娥舞袖，天犬迎門，誠留驕杰久居宮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：將我國航天成就與傳說相結合，妙趣橫生！贊！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">22.上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蟾桂眾星捧；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江山素影披。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：對仗工整！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飛花追暝色；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">倒影襯繁霜。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：比喻得當！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山巒倒映嫦娥舞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">桂影平鋪后羿迎。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：傳說故事情節運用合理！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">林中驚鳥鳴春悅；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江里游魚逐影忙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：月出驚鳥用典恰當。描寫生動！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">23. 仰望星空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">桂魄高懸，灑向人間影搖曳；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蘭魂獨抱，平生世外香寂寥。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：從月和蘭的品性為切入點來寫，贊！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十五中秋，影橫滿院光穿隙；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">兩三好景，香沁閑窗樹列庭。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：景聯對仗工整！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">24. 五月的云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三五良宵開玉宇；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大千世界涌冰輪。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評：涌字形容月？可再琢！</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">25.劉國慶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清霜滿地添思念；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">濁酒一壺慰圣賢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評：對仗工整，表現了月的懷思意象！</span></p>
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